Today we are live-blogging and and looking at your thesis statements again. Your task is divided into two stages:
1: After you log in, type your thesis statement in to the comments section, just as you did before.
2. Constructively comment on someone else's thesis statement, using only that person's display name (example- display name, colon or dash, then comment). Try to include a positive, as well as a recommendation.
The show criticizes human beings and human nature, through their destructive traits when faced with fear.
ReplyDelete"The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street" criticizes mankind's tendency to act and think irrationally in times of panic.
ReplyDeleteEveryday actions and events can be misunderstood as threatening once a mob mentality takes over.
ReplyDeleteThe Twilight Zone episode "The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street" displays that when people are in a crowd, they tend to build off of each others' unjustified opinions and accuse anyone for even the slightest idiosyncrasy. This eventually leads to unwanted suspicion and a degree of chaos.
ReplyDeleteThe show "The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street", criticizes human nature by showing that when humans are put in an unusual or scary environment, the way they usually act changes in order to protect themselves.
ReplyDeleteThis twilight zone episode depicts Maple street, where out of fear, neighbors accuse each other of being alien. This is a depiction of how a crowd mentality can make it socially acceptable to act on ones own misguided prejudices all under the guise of helping the group.
ReplyDeleteHuman behavior in a crowd is characterized by being quick to judge, which leads to an expectant fear of judgment from others.
ReplyDeleteWhen in a group people lose the ability to think on their own and become less independent minded as as shown in "The Monsters are due on Maple Street."
ReplyDeleteThe Monsters Are Due on Maple Street demonstrates how it is human nature to feel ethnocentric while sharing traits among a group, giving an explanation for why crowds encourage a sense of security thus increasing dominant nature.
ReplyDeleteOn " The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street", when there is a crowd of people there are bound to be followers and a scapegoat because they are afraid to stand out and be individuals and because there is power in numbers.
ReplyDeleteWhen humans are faced with fear the way people behave changes while being in a crowd by blaming others for the problems that they are going through instead of themselves.
ReplyDeletepm25: I like the topic of people acting irrational, but I think thesis could benefit from a strong cause-effect relationship (example: chaos=irrational behavior).
ReplyDeletenittymaki- overall... its epic... some improvements could be do use less general words and speak with more conviction for example instead of saying "usually acts" just write "they act"...but other than that its epic
ReplyDeleteThe Twilight Zone episode, "The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street", criticizes human nature through the idea that when people are presented with danger and fear, they tend to act based on prejudice and intolerance trying to protect solely their own interests.
ReplyDelete"The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street" criticizes human beings' natural tendency to sacrifice others when they feel vulnerable because of something they do not understand or because they fear being ostracized themselves.
ReplyDeleteThe Twilight Zone demonstrates the accusative nature of the human being when placed under pressure by a large group, because the fear and confusion will cause them to accuse others around them to gain support from the rest of the group.
ReplyDeletePhelpsphan08: You have a strong main idea, but I think you can clarify some areas of your thesis. For example, what kind of everyday actions can be misunderstood?
ReplyDeleteThe show "The Monsters Are Due on Mapple Street" criticizes human beings and human nature, disturbing their everyday routine, under the feeling of fear.
ReplyDeleteDinosaur11-You have a good thesis with solid examples that could make a good paragraph or essay. I would recommend either getting rid of the second sentence or combining it with the first so it is "...the slightest idiosyncrasy, eventually leading the to unwanted suspicion and a degree of chaos.
ReplyDeleteThe episode "The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street" emphasizes how people tend to blow situations out of proportions when they don't understand the situation due to fear.
ReplyDelete"Monsters are Due on Maple Street" shows that when one is immersed in a crowd they lose much of what makes them an independent person in return for a sense of protection from a random and chaotic mob.
ReplyDeleteMercerchiefs13: I like your topic and believe it is well supported by the show. What type of fear is the show criticizing? Be more specific about the type of fear that causes destructive traits. Your body paragraph should explain these destructive traits. You could also choose one destructive trait so that your paragraph is more focused.
ReplyDeleteNIttymaki 30: I like the idea being conveyed. However the means of conveying this idea could be improved. The thesis is a little awkward but it could be improved by changing the placement of commas and reorganizing some words or phrases.
ReplyDeleteDinosaur11- This is a good thesis, but it has a little too much going on. Your topics are very good but you should narrow down the topics on which you plan to write your paragraph on because as of now, your thesis is very wordy and needs to be trimmed.
ReplyDeleteNIttymaki: The thesis explains the what (Critizes human nature) and the how (by showing that humans..).
ReplyDeleteMaybe instead of put=placed and instead of "the way they usually act changes" to their actions change...
Give/specify an example of an unusual environment.
In being part of a crowd, there may be a chance of a loss of individuality. One may be seduced by his or her peers which causes all sense of self to disappear because one is doing something that he or she would not do alone.
ReplyDeleteDinosaur11: The thesis is maybe a little too long but other then that, it a good thesis. It is well detailed.
ReplyDeleteNIttymaki30:I like your thesis; I think it will give you a lot to write about in your paragraph.I think you should be more specific about how the way they act changes.
ReplyDeleteThe episode "The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street" criticizes the elements that humans are naturally born with which emphasizes our fear of the unknown.
ReplyDeleteNIttymaki 30: I really like your topic, but a suggestion that I have is to be specific on their changes and on how they change.
ReplyDeletelikeaboss- I like the second part of your thesis,i don't think the first sentence is necessary. You could probably start with "A crowd mentality...", but I like and agree with the message.
ReplyDeletePhelpsphano8- your thesis proves a very good point and it relates to today, but you have two directions in which you could write your essay which might make your thesis a little confusing. You might just want to take one of them out.
ReplyDeleteNIttymaki 30: I like the idea of a foreign or frightening environment which affects the way that people act as a form of self-defense. This thesis could benefit from a stronger connection between the way that people's actions change and the negative effect which warrants the criticism.
ReplyDeleteChuck Norris- I think your main idea is very strong and you convey it confidently. I also like how you convey the "How" of your thesis. The only thing that may need change is the transition between the what and the how, it sounds a bit awkward. Good Work.
ReplyDeleteLikeaboss - I don't believe your first sentence is necessary. It should be included, just not in the thesis. Overall I like the thesis and think it does a good job answering the prompt. You might want to try tying the idea of "fear" into it because I believe fear is an important part of the mob mentality.
ReplyDeleteEveryone: Great job with your theses, and also your comments - clear and constructive. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteMickey Mouse: Class ended before I really got a chance to comment on yours. I think that more depth and focus can sharpen, freshen your thesis; what about the group mentality causes someone to lose his individualism? Why don't they think for themselves?
Ignatius J Reilly: Hmmmm. Lots going on here. I got hung up on "ethnocentric"; is this what you mean? You'll have to prove that the show uses ethnic groups to divide/classify people. Also unsure about "dominant nature." Perhaps focusing, clarifying one idea and elaborating could strengthen thesis.
Golfgirl06: Lots of ideas here, and a possible cause=effect thesis if you were to clarify it a bit and make it less of a run-on. Focus on fear as a catalyst.
Blue Star: Fear seems to be the salient topic here - focus on what it causes and why. Rework your sentence structure; too many confusing prepositional phrases.
Awesomesauce: Not bad. Sums up at least one of the show's main ideas. Prejudice is a clear enough topic - intolerance may be trickier. Maybe disrespect, inhumanity?
mickmagg: Good thoughts here - again, fear being the catalyst for brutal (inherent?) human behavior. The phrasing of "sacrificing others" may not be exactly what you mean. I'd reconsider that.
littlemisssunshne: Good ideas here, but wording is confusing. It sounds like the show is disturbing peoples' everyday routines and feeling fear. Rephrase.
Luna Maxwell: Good topic choice: fear. Blowing things out of proportion is certainly something we can all relate to. If your focus is that people don't understand the situation, make sure you elaborate.
The Intellectual: I like your idea: that we trade in our individualism for security. Keep that idea - explore and exemplify!
Red 7: The perils of conformity! A good topic, but keep in mind what happens in the show and what it leads to. Go a bit deeper.
Catdog: Good, but what are these elements? Be more specific, and focus more on the fear that is part of the end of your thesis.